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Nowadays, the way people interact with each other has changed due to technology. How has technology affected the types of relationships between people? Was it a positive or negative development.

#people #technology #relationships #development
It is known that
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technology
 represents a major evolution of humankind that in the modern era we live it is vital for our day-to-day jobs or entertainment, even
technology
 has its own benefits and flaws, that in
a
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 way or another impact
on
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the
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society.
Firstly
, social media is where relationships can
torn
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 apart,
due to
 the
fact
 that
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 numerous
people
 stalk their partners’
profile
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profiles
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 on Facebook, Instagram or other social accounts they have, which can increase problems in a relationship, owning to the
fact
 that, some
people
 are jealous or insecure, and somehow they do not trust their partner, which leads to a broken relationship.
In addition
 to that, numerous
people
 in our society
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tends
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 to stalk
influence
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and influence
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people
 or celebrities on social media, and
this
 makes them insecure about themselves or their bodies, which in the end leads to depression and anxiety,
due to
 the
fact
 that
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 they cannot achieve their lifestyle or dream body.
Secondly
,
technology
,
also
 have brought improvements in
bounding
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 with
people
 from all around the globe, where you can make new friends, and learn about different cultures and their beliefs, which develops a
persons’
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their
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communication skills.
Furthermore
, with the existence of modern
technology
, many lives were changed,
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 to the
fact
 that, with the help of
technology
 our lives are much easier
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the most vital role that
technology
 has,
it
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is in the medical field, where with the help of
technology
, numerous lives are saved,
due to
 the
fact
 that, medical
machineries
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machinery
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are build
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 with the help of
technology
. In conclusion,
technology
 has an enormous impact on humans interactions between them,
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 may have advantages and disadvantages,
however
, it depends on us, in which direction we are going
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in our development
with
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technology
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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