The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
The chart demonstrates what
Anthropology
graduates
from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table indicates the salaries of the anthropologists in
work
after 5 years. As we can see from the pie chart,
majority
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of
Anthropology
graduates
are employed. Fifty-two per
cent
of them have a full-time job. Almost twenty per
cent
of
graduates
have either
a
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part-time
work
or it is combined with
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study. Eight per
cent
of students continue their full-time education. Only twelve per
cent
of
graduates
are unemployed. The information about all the rest
graduates
is unknown.
Thus
, most
of
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Anthropology
graduates
have a job. Half of those who
work
in
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the Government
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sector earn more than a hundred
thousand
dollars
. It is less than
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the proportion
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of freelance concultantants who get the same amount of money.
Besides
, it is only one-third of those who
work
for private companies. We can see nearly the same percentage of those who get from fifty
thousand
dollars
to
ninty-nine
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ninety-nine
thousand
dollars
as freelance consultants and in
government
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the government
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sector. The situation is different in private companies. More of them get from fifty
thousand
to seventy-four
thousand
dollars
than from seventy-five to ninety-nine
thousand
dollars
. The proportion of those who
work
for private companies
for
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from twenty-five
thousand
to forty-nine
thousand
dollars
is half bigger than the same one in
government
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the government
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sector and as freelancers. So, the chart and the table show us that most
of
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Anthropology
graduates
are employed and
a
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salary
more
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than twenty-five
thousand
dollars
after five year's
work
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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