In some countries, celebrities get higher salaries than senior politicians. What do you think is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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that some famous
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are higher than
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top government members in
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for whether it is
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positive
or negative development. On the one hand, celebrities
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more
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of many reasons.
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, they charge great service
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work.
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a movie star in India
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crore rupees for doing a movie.
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, celebrity awareness
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people is more common, almost everyone
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about their lifestyle,
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and profession
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.
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many big companies
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them to make them brand
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ambassador
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their products, in exchange celebrities receive
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great amount of money.
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, some of them hold concerts in different cities of every province which is
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a lucrating
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lucrating
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lucrative
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opportunity
for their fans to meet them in person,
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fans ended up buying tickets.
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, these are some ways by which celebs
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.
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, the salaries of
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senior politicians are considerably lower
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then
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than
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celebs. The
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reasons
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popularities
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amoung
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among
people, they received
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wage
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for their service.
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, they do not frequently do adverts as they barely have time for doing
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because of their busy schedule.
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, they hold events but those are not chargeable.
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that
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is
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neither
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negative
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a negative
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develpoment
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development
nor
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positive
as both
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are completely different and
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unique
in their own way.
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, people should not compare
salaries
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the salaries
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of these two
proffesionals
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professionals
.
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