In some countries, celebrities get higher salaries than senior politicians. What do you think is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?
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compared
persons
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person
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earnings
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a few
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shall discuss what are the reasons for this
and provide conclusion
for whether it is Add an article
a conclusion
possitive
or negative development.
On the one hand, celebrities Correct your spelling
positive
earns
more Change the verb form
earn
becuase
of many reasons. Correct your spelling
because
Firstly
, they charge great service cahrge
for Correct your spelling
charge
there
work. Correct your spelling
their
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example
a movie star in India Add a comma
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charge
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charges
one
crore rupees for doing a movie. Change preposition
of one
Secondly
, celebrity awareness amoung
people is more common, almost everyone Correct your spelling
among
know
about their lifestyle, Change the verb form
knows
profession
. Correct word choice
and profession
As a
result
many big companies Add a comma
,result
approch
them to make them brand Correct your spelling
approach
ambesedor
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ambassador
of
their products, in exchange celebrities receive Change preposition
for
the
great amount of money. Correct article usage
a
Lastly
, some of them hold concerts in different cities of every province which is Correct article usage
a lucrating
lucrating
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lucrative
apportunity
for their fans to meet them in person, Correct your spelling
opportunity
as a
result
fans ended up buying tickets. Add the comma(s)
,result
Hence
, these are some ways by which celebs earns
.
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earn
On the other hand
, the salaries of the
senior politicians are considerably lower Correct article usage
apply
then
celebs. The Correct your spelling
than
resones
are they have Correct your spelling
reasons
less
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fewer
popularities
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popularity
amoung
people, they received Correct your spelling
among
fixed
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a fixed
wage
for their service.
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wages
Moreover
, they do not frequently do adverts as they barely have time for doing this
because of their busy schedule. Also
, they hold events but those are not chargeable.
To conclude
, it can be say
that Change the verb form
be said
this
is nither
Correct your spelling
neither
negative
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a negative
develpoment
nor Correct your spelling
development
posstive
as both Correct your spelling
positive
profession
are completely different and Change to a plural noun
professions
uniqe
in their own way. Correct your spelling
unique
Hence
, people should not compare salaries
of these two Correct article usage
the salaries
proffesionals
.Correct your spelling
professionals
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