The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

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The bar chart compares the amount of

time

each day that people from four different countries spent doing activities

were

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going to the

beach

, visiting different attractions, and reading

while

on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

Overall

, eight

hours

per day, the

Chinese

tourists

were the ones who read books the longest. The Brazilians,

on the other hand

, were at the

beach

for the longest of six

hours

Chinese

visitors read books for a median of eight

hours

a day,

while

Brazilian and Turkish

tourists

read books for an average of four

hours

. Brazilian

tourists

visited the

beach

for the longest length of

time

for six

hours

while

Chinese

tourists

visited the

beach

for the shortest period of

time

for three

hours

, or twice as long as Brazilian

tourists

. Turkish visitors and Americans spent approximately the same amount of

time

at the

beach

for four and five

hours

, respectively.

Chinese

travelers spent the least amount of

time

visiting locations, just one hour

while

American and Turkish

tourists

both spent three

hours

there.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

173 words

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many high level of positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than fifty percent female. compnies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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