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The chart below shows the results of a ssurvey about people's cffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Asutralian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a ssurvey about people's cffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Asutralian cities.
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The given bar chart illustrates the percentages of
Australia
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Australian
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residents
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 who buy
coffee
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 and tea and
also
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 their drinking habits.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that going to a
coffee
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 for drinking
coffee
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 and tea in the
last
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 month is the most popular drinking
habits
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habit
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 in five different cities in Australia, except for Adelaide.
In contrast
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, the least percentage of drinking
habit
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habits
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 is
buy
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buying
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 fresh
coffee
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. Looking at the information in more detail,
Sydey
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Sydney
 is the
Austarlia
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Australian
 city that has the most consumers
in
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of
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 fresh
coffee
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 at 43%. Meanwhile, Brisbane and
Adelide
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Adelaide
 have the same percentage of
residents
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 who buy fresh
coffe
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coffee
.
Furthermore
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, purchasing instant
coffee
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 is the second
popular
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most popular
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 drinking habit in Australia,
in
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with
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which
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apply
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between
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apply
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around 46% and 52%
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residents
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of residents
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 where Brisbane is
highest
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the highest
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for
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in
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this
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 category. Among the three drinking habits, buying
a
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apply
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coffee
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 and tea in the cafe is the most popular. Hobart and Melbourne have the highest proportion of their
residents
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to
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in
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this
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 category at approximately 63%. The lowest proportion
for
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of
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 people who go to
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a cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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 for drinking is
Adelide
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Adelaide
 at just under 50%.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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