The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 avout one university. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 avout one university.

Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates positive
assessment
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assessments
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about getting good
score
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scores
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for different aspects of a university. For the teaching quality, electronic
resources
and teaching quality are getting increased as the year
go
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by between 2000-2010,
however
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the range of modules decreased slightly as the year goes.
According to
the chart in 2000, students gave good
feedbacks
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feedback
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on print
resources
at 85% meanwhile the pupils give poor feedback on the range
on
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of
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modules offered and electronic
resources
at 32% and 45%. As the
years
go on, between 2000-2005 there was
decrease
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a decrease
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of 2 %
for
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teaching quality
however
it went back to 69% in 2010.
Also
, the electronic
resources
increased a lot throughout the 10
years
like
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shown in the bar above, the percentage in 2000 was 45%
while
in 2010 was 85%.
Subsequently
, the rate for buildings or facilities remain constant throughout the
years
at 77% In conclusion, there was
improvement
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an improvement
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for
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some areas in the survey rates except the modules offered in all the
years
that the survey took place.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words resources, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • teaching quality
  • facilities
  • student satisfaction
  • support services
  • trends
  • ratings
  • infrastructure
  • utilization rates
  • feedback
  • university policies
  • available services
  • evolution
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • analyzing
  • overview
  • discussing
  • exploring
  • examining
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