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Many people nowdays live in societies where consumer goods are relatively cheap. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Opinions are
devided
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divided
 on whether it is more beneficial on detrimental when consumer
goods
 are economical to purchase in
society
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the society
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people
 live in nowadays.
This
 essay will think that the positive effects could
be overshadow
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 by the disadvantages. One of the main drawbacks of purchasing
goods
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at on
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on
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an
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 economical price is over-purchasing.
For instance
, it has been observed that
people
 end up buying even those things which they do not really need, just
due to
 their low prices.
This
 causes over-spending their hard-earned money resulting in fewer savings. To add to
this
, most
of
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consumer
goods
 offer basic capital to the person to buy
it
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so that
people
 would like to purchase cheaper
goods
 to fulfil their demands as much as they could.
Nevertheless
, I am of the view that the
benefit
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beneficial
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 impacts of
this
 social movement on affordability and convenience could be important.
Firstly
,
due to
globalisation
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,globalisation
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 everything is available in today's markets
with
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at
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 better
price
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prices
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,
people
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and people
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 buy
goods
 beyond their limits to look cool or stylish. They purchase branded phones or cars to show off.
Moreover
, we can talk with anyone throughout the globe with the help of
smart phones
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smartphones
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. So, the life of
human
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humans
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 become more comfortable when we have these
goods
.
Secondly
, a consumer good could handle household work for a person.
For example
, washing machines and microwave ovens for washing clothes and
to cook
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 food within seconds respectively. So, we could have more time to save when we own smart
machine
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machines
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. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, regardless of the negative side of the trend, I hold the belief that these could be far
important
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more important
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 to low price
goods
 in today's society, to which affordability and convenience.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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