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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In contemporary times, health problems caused by
junk
food
 are a controversial issue.
For
this
 reason, I mainly disagree with the idea that governments should impose a high
tax
 on
this
 kind of
food
.  
To begin
 with, it is certain that high taxes discourage people from buying fast
food
.
For instance
, cigarettes and alcohol are successful for that purpose with high taxes. Not only do they not let consumers purchase them, but they
also
 contribute to the government's financial resources.
Consequently
, high taxes generate money for the citizen's health insurance policy.
Furthermore
, greasy and salty
food
 is unhealthy, as are tobacco and alcohol. In the case of
junk
food
, it leads to obesity or diabetes
due to
 its high calorie and fat content.   Having said that, the high
tax
 on
junk
food
 has a negative impact on people who do not have enough salary. Basically, the advantage of
junk
food
 is reasonable for those who cannot afford to buy healthy
food
 because it is
also
 true that fresh
food
,
such
 as organic vegetables, is costly.
Although
 vegetables contain high nutrition, they are not enough to fill a stomach.
However
, fast
food
 makes us feel satisfied easily because of its cost and high calories.   In conclusion,
although
 imposing a high
tax
 on fast
food
 solves health and financial issues, there are those in need
due to
 poverty, and those people have to resort to cheap
junk
food
. Given those reasons, I believe that increasing the
tax
 on fast
food
 has a negative effect.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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