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some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion ielts essay

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Nowadays,
the
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capital
punishment
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it
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is not use
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 as it was back in the
days
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,
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, in some
countries
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 they still use
this
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 method for justice. In
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essay
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 I will discuss why should capital
punishment
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 be allowed or not.
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, capital
punishment
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 should be
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 for vital
crimes
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,
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and not regular
crimes
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 that can be punished by jail,
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 some
people
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 may not deserve capital
punishment
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.
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, a
person
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 might be innocent and deserve a second chance,
while
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 for other
people
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 there is no excuse for their
crimes
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 like murder or rape. That's why for
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 type of
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crimes
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crime
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 I consider that execution might bring peace to the victims or the family's victim.
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, a plethora of
people
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, consider that capital
punishment
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 can be a harsh sentence for the
person
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's who are charged with
crimes
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 and that they should deserve
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life
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a life
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 sentence to death in
the
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prison,that way the
person
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 who is being guilty can spend the rest of his
life
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 regretting what he did and asking for forgiveness, eventually, maybe getting a second chance to
life
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,
due to
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 the fact that not everybody that commits
crimes
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 is a horrible
person
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,
however
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, there are some bonders that should be respected.
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, a
person
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 who caused a car accident,
he
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committed a crime, but
this
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 should not mean that he would be capital
punishment
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 for his actions. That's why some
people
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 consider that capital
punishment
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 should not be used. In my opinion, capital
punishment
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 should be used just in major cases with
crimes
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 that are unforgivable, and those
people
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 who don't want a second chance to change their
life
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in
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 good, even though in today's society
this
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 method lost
his
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popularity, it is still an effective way to protect the community from criminals.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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