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Many parents put a lot of pressure on their children to succeed. To what extent do you agree?

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In our modern world, more and more adults have been increasing their concern about their kids'
future
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. In the present, to ensure that
children
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 will succeed,
parents
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 push them harder.
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 essay will explain some of the reasons, and how it can improve their
children
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's
future
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 decisions. I completely disagree that
parents
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 should not put too much pressure on their kids. First and foremost, many
children
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 will feel stress and low-self esteem because most
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 will force too much on their
children
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 to have a wonderful quality of education in university and better
future
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 careers.
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, many families always restrict them to study
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subject that can be successful in life, but kids do not prefer to study
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them
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. It will impact
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their daily life and initial negative emotion
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 as depression or more the biggest serious disease which may lead to increased
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 problem
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.
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,
children
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 often feel bad about some negative attributes even
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if they
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 attempt for threatening their life
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 as suicide.
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, pushing a lot of stress on
children
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 is not the right way to make them succeed in their
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.
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,
children
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 need to learn knowledge with happiness and joy.
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 them too much stress it does not help them to develop their grades because if they fail the exam, they will feel insecure to tell their
parents
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.
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,
children
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 need to learn with pleasure,
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 they will get a good grade so that making
parents
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 will feel appreciated.
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,
parents
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 should admit whatever their
children
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 want and just give advice to them. In conclusion, even though
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the enforcement
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 of
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 might help to gain the success of
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. In my opinion, it could have more drawbacks for them emotionally
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 as depression.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic excellence
  • extracurricular activities
  • prosperous future
  • societal standards
  • peer competition
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • unfulfilled ambitions
  • resource availability
  • opportunity exploitation
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