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Government should spend money on railway rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some
people
 think that the government should invest more in
railways
 than
roads
.But I personally think both modes of transportation are equally important, the same amount of money should be used for
railways
 and
roads
. The main reason for building
railways
 is, it is very safe to
travel
 and easy to commute for
people
. Goods can
also
 be transported easily from one place to another. It can carry hundreds of
people
 and tons of goods as well. More rail lines should
also
 be constructed because our country's population is increasing and
this
 will help a large group of
people
 to
travel
 by
trains
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.
Additionally
, it can be cheaper than any other mode of transportation. It is
also
 more environmentally friendly if compared to
roads
 as vehicles need a large amount of fuel to
travel
.
Although
roads
 are less safe as accidents occur on
a
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an
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 almost daily basis,
however
 what about those products and goods that cannot be transferred by train
.
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Then
 obviously they have to be transferred by a truck and van.
People
 need a smooth road to
travel
 at a faster pace. In conclusion, everything has its own advantages and disadvantages, similar is the case with
railways
 and
roads
. Cars have to face traffic congestion which
railways
 don’t,
hence
Railways
 should be more predominant in main cities as it reduces traffic problems. Railway has a greater number of pros but we cannot fully the
roads
.
Roads
 are very convenient as they provide
direction
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 to the place of origin.
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