You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates the average number of
visitors
entering a
museum
in summer and winter in 2003. There are three types of museums that are British
Museum
,
science
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the science
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museum
and
natural
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the natural
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history
museum
.
In
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At
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the
starting
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start
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of June 600
thousand
visitors
came to visit
British
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the British
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museum
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Museum
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and after
that
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,that
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there has been rapid growth in the
month
of July
that
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apply
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is approximately more than 700
thousand
people. In the
month
of
august
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August
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,
visitors
have declined significantly by 500
thousand
individuals and
then
again increased slowly in September by approximately 650
thousand
. Natural history
museum
had reached around 550
thousand
visitors
.
Then
slowly decreased in the
month
of July by less than 400
thousand
and it
has
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remained in the
month
of August. But a
slowly
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slow
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growth has been seen in September by less than 500
thousand
. 400
thousand
people visited
science
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the science
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museum
in the
month
of June and it has almost remained
at
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apply
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constant till the
month
of July but, after
that
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,that
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it
has
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apply
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declined a little in the
month
of August by 300
thousand
visitors
. In September it has shown an increase in
visitors
by approximately reaching 500
thousand
. In conclusion, British museums and natural history
museum
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museums
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had to face a lot of ups and downs but science
museum
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museums
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had
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apply
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almost remained
at
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apply
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constant
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a constant
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museum, thousand, month with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Peak season
  • Off-peak season
  • Visitor influx
  • Steady increase
  • Significant drop
  • Month-on-month comparison
  • Seasonal variation
  • Cultural attraction
  • Tourism trends
  • Historical data
  • Visitor demographics
  • Analytical observation
  • Comparative analysis
  • Statistical evidence
  • Conclusive summary
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