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In some countries, girls and boys are educated in different schools rather than in the same school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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In some nations,
girls
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 and
boys
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 are educated in separate schools
instead
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 of the same
school
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. In my opinion, the merits of
single-
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sex
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-
school
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 outweigh the demerits. On the one hand, there are several drawbacks
of
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to
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 teaching
girls
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 and
boys
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 in different
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school
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schools
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.
Firstly
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,
single-
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sex
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school
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 do not give
childern
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children
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to learn in more detail about
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sex
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.
This
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 is because the
single-
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sex
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school
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 do not give
children
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 a chance to make real contact with
other
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the other
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sex
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, which
this
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 have a negative impact
in
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on
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children
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 later in their parental life
,
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because they do not
enough
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have enough
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experice
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experience
 to deal with other
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, and
then
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this
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 can increase the rates of divorce.
Secondly
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,
the
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single-
sex
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-
school
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 is extremely expensive.
This
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 is
due to
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 the fact that
,
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 governments need to build individual
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school
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schools
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 for
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 and
boys
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, which
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this
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can increase the financial burden
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 the public budget of the country.
On the other hand
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, I would like to argue that the benefits of teaching
girls
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 and
boys
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 in separate schools
significantly
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are significantly
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more far
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farther
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 than mixing
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school
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schools
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. The first advantage,
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single-
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single-sex school
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sex
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-
school
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 can increase the
performace
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performance
 of
chlidren
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children
. To put
in other words
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,
children
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 are more likely to focus
in
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 their
study
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studies
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 rather than concentrate to attract
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sex
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, which
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this
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apply
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can
ehance
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enhance
 the outcomes of
education
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the education
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 system.
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, some
boys
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 neglect their
study
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studies
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 and only focus to make
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 things to attract
girls
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. The second advantage,
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the
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that
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 separate
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 can protect
children
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 to develop sexual diseases namely, HIV, because
the
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most
of
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apply
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sexual diseases transfer through relationships
bewteen
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between
girls
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an
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and
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boys
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 out of
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the fram
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fram
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frame
 of marriage.
A
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 a result,
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the
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separate
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school
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schools
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 can provide
healthy
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a healthy
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 environment for
children
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. In conclusion, in my
perspective
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 the upsides of single-
sex
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school
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schools
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 outperform the
downsids
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downsides
downside
,
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 because
it
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they
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 can assist to boosts
of
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productivity among
children
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as well as
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 provide
healthy
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a healthy
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 environment.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • segregation
  • discrimination
  • gender-specific
  • distractions
  • focus
  • safe
  • comfortable
  • gender stereotypes
  • social interaction
  • interpersonal skills
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