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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have a myriad of views on whether we should use large amounts of money on the cross-border railways’ construction to build up the linkage to different cities.
Although
 some people may think that it can help to enhance economic development,
due to
 the huge cost and long period of construction, I still believe that we are better to allocate the
resources
 to the urgent matter in the local transport system, which improves the existing public transport facilities. Of the reasons why we should construct a new railway system, probably the most significant reason is that it can extend the development to the new areas, which aids in relocating the
resources
 and population.
Hence
, nearby areas can collaborate together to bring about a synergy effect for economic and cultural activities.
For instance
, the High-speed Rail in
Hong
Kong
 has shortened travel time to Mainland China, which just needed around 30 minutes to reach Guangzhou. It is efficient for people to work or travel to the Greater Bay Area, which is named the “One-hour living circle”.
Therefore
,
Hong
Kong
 and other nearby areas are more connected through convenient transit and mutual cooperation is easier to be established. Despite the above arguments, I still believe that local transportation improvement is more important than the cross-border train. Since those trains are built in the long term and required lots of
resources
 for supporting the construction, it may reduce the
resources
 which are spent in maintaining of local commune system. MTR, which is the local metro in
Hong
Kong
, is the prime example. There have been rapid
service
 disruptions have happened in recent years, including the High-Speed Rail’s
service
 being suspended for several hours, and
thus
 massive chaos was caused. Imagine If the tourists who travel to
Hong
Kong
 experience
such
 chaos, it will demolish their impressions of the city and turn to a loss of tourism eventually. With
this
 in mind, stable-in-the-art transportation is vital for the operations of a city, the failure of local commune
service
 will diminish its economic growth. Under
this
 line of thinking,
although
 there are valid reasons for building the new train across to the nearby cities, I personally believe that enhancing the local subway, especially lower the rate of
service
 disruptions, is more significant to the growth of the economy in a city.
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