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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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Smoking has been banned in public
places
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 like parks, museums, and hospitals in many nations and the law is supported by a lot of
people
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. I agree with
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 initiative since it reduces the harmful effects on the surrounding
people
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 and it
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 discourages
smokers
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 from smoking. The main reason why making it illegal for smoking in public
places
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 makes sense is that it minimizes the risk of innocent
people
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 being unintentionally affected by a smoker nearby, which is called passive smoke. Passive smoking leads to enormous consequences, especially for children and pregnant women because it leads to diseases like cancer among youngsters and babies. A ban in public
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 is required to limit
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 type of exposure.
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, after Ireland introduced a law to ban smoking in all indoor
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 like restaurants and pubs, there was a significant decline in the number of employees suffering from lung cancer and other lethal diseases. Another reason why it's wise to bring about
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 ban is that it encourages more and more
smokers
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 to quit their habit. Since it's not allowed to smoke in public areas,
people
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 who want to have a cigarette need to go outside and it appears to be a great annoyance and impolite if they're having dinner with their customers or friends.
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,
smokers
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 consume fewer cigarettes and gradually abandon their habit. One piece of evidence is that in a street interview in Germany, nearly 60% of ex-
smokers
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 gave up smoking
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 social pressure brought about by smoking bans. In conclusion, I believe that smoking in public
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 should be made against the law so that it prevents innocent
people
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 from developing serious health conditions caused by passive smoking and reduces the number of
smokers
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • prevalence
  • respiratory issues
  • environmental pollution
  • litter
  • healthcare costs
  • smoking-induced illnesses
  • encourage smokers to quit
  • public health improvement
  • justified
  • public spaces
  • exposure
  • non-smokers
  • inconvenience
  • younger populations
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