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In many large cities, people waste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestions on the road. hat are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays, the
number
 of people increased globally, especially in large cities. Individuals spend more
time
 on the
traffic-road
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road
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. There are several reasons behind of
time
 waisting to reach the target place. Here in
this
 essay, I am going to reveal the main causes and explore the best things to do in order to decrease traffic congestion. First of all, the main streets are the same but the
number
 of human populations is raised.
For example
, five decades ago there
are
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 5 billion persons living on the earth's surface,
while
 today’s human population doubled and reached 8 billion in
number
.
However
, the roads are the same and the main ways of transportation are unchanged.
Furthermore
, the second cause will be the human mindset.
For instance
, most employees are going to work in the morning at the same
time
 and in the evening they leave their work and come back to their home together at five PM.
On the other hand
, when we want to treat a patient,
firstly
, we have to find the causes behind the disease, and
then
 we can treat the patient.
Similarly
, to reduce the traffic road, we should focus on the main problems and find reasonable solutions. For
such
 old roads, the government should repair them and build some new bridges and
also
 increase public transportation for citizens.
In addition
, there should be some awareness for society to contribute to human
time
 management at the individual level.
Overall
, people spend their
time
 daily because of the old streets, the high
number
 of cars
as well
as
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and
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 workers going to work and coming back to their homes
altogether
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. Making new bridges and public transportation for citizens will be the best solution.
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