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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts the manufacturing process of instant
noodles
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.
Overall
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, manufacturing quick
noodles
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 is accompanied by automatic steps. There are a total of 8 different automatic steps in the manufacturing process of instant
noodles
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, starting with the
flour
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 in storage silos and ending with labelling and sealing the cups.
First,
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a large truck full of
flour
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 was stored in an enormous storage silos.
Next,
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the
flour
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 with a portion of water and oil is added to the mixer. A roller took out the mixer of
flour
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, water, and oil and convert it into dough sheets.
Further
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, those sheets are transformed into strips and afterwards into the
noodles
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 discs in corresponding sections.
Then
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 the noodle discs are cooked in oil and dried for a certain amount of time.
Subsequently
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, they are transferred into containers with vegetables and other spices.
Lastly
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, containers are labelled and sealed with brand labels. Labelled and sealed bowls full of quick
noodles
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 are shipped to the desired customers and shops.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles, flour with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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