The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts the manufacturing process of instant
noodles
.
Overall
, manufacturing quick noodles
is accompanied by automatic steps. There are a total of 8 different automatic steps in the manufacturing process of instant noodles
, starting with the flour
in storage silos and ending with labelling and sealing the cups.
First,
a large truck full of flour
was stored in an enormous storage silos. Next,
the flour
with a portion of water and oil is added to the mixer. A roller took out the mixer of flour
, water, and oil and convert it into dough sheets. Further
, those sheets are transformed into strips and afterwards into the noodles
discs in corresponding sections.
Then
the noodle discs are cooked in oil and dried for a certain amount of time. Subsequently
, they are transferred into containers with vegetables and other spices. Lastly
, containers are labelled and sealed with brand labels. Labelled and sealed bowls full of quick noodles
are shipped to the desired customers and shops.Submitted by ramanpreetsingh8800 on
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