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Scientists tell us that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people still continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions for this?

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In recent years, doing unhealthy
activities
 has been in the spotlight of public attention
as well as
 that of the
government
. In
this
 essay, the reasons caused by the phenomenon will be discussed followed by the measures that can address the issue. First of all, one of the main unhealthy
activities
 is bad eating
habit
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habits
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. These days, many experts have become concerned that having unhealthy eating
habit
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habits
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 has a negative effect on increasing the number of obesity. Obesity
people
 tend to enjoy eating junk foods and fast foods, and they suffer from many
disease
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diseases
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.
In addition
, many
people
 may mistake that they eat more food and they look
like
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awesome because they are impacted
on
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by
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 Youtube.
For example
, in South Korea, since watching and reporting to eat food is a trend, so many
people
 eat more food and have bad eating
habit
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habits
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.
As a result
, the number of
obesity
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obese
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people
 doubled during one year.
Therefore
, much needs to be done to solve
this
problem
. To address
this
 cause, there are several possible approaches. In terms of
the
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individual efforts,
people
 should recognize that they have bad habits about eating and they try to change their menu more healthy. In terms of the
government
's efforts, the
government
 should make
activities
 they
to
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enjoy and
excercise
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exercise
.
To sum up
,
although
 unhealthy
activities
is
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are
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the
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a
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 serious
problem
,
it is clear that
 much is being done to fix
this
problem
. If
individual
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individuals
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 and the
government
 work together, it will soon be the
problem
 of the past.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • chemical reactions
  • dependency
  • social and cultural norms
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • temptations
  • implementing policies
  • taxing
  • supportive environment
  • accountability
  • unhealthy habits
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