Scientists tell us that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people still continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions for this?

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In recent years, doing unhealthy

activities

has been in the spotlight of public attention

as well as

that of the

government

. In

this

essay, the reasons caused by the phenomenon will be discussed followed by the measures that can address the issue. First of all, one of the main unhealthy

activities

is bad eating

habit

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habits

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. These days, many experts have become concerned that having unhealthy eating

habit

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habits

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has a negative effect on increasing the number of obesity. Obesity

people

tend to enjoy eating junk foods and fast foods, and they suffer from many

disease

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diseases

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In addition

, many

people

may mistake that they eat more food and they look

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apply

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awesome because they are impacted

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Youtube.

For example

, in South Korea, since watching and reporting to eat food is a trend, so many

people

eat more food and have bad eating

habit

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habits

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As a result

, the number of

obesity

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obese

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people

doubled during one year.

Therefore

, much needs to be done to solve

this

problem

. To address

this

cause, there are several possible approaches. In terms of

the

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individual efforts,

people

should recognize that they have bad habits about eating and they try to change their menu more healthy. In terms of the

government

's efforts, the

government

should make

activities

they

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enjoy and

excercise

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exercise

To sum up

although

unhealthy

activities

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are

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the

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serious

problem

it is clear that

much is being done to fix

this

problem

. If

individual

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individuals

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and the

government

work together, it will soon be the

problem

of the past.

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chemical reactions
dependency
social and cultural norms
convenience
accessibility
education and awareness campaigns
temptations
implementing policies
taxing
supportive environment
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Scientists tell us that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people still continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions for this?

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