Scientists tell us that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people still continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions for this?

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In recent years, doing unhealthy
activities
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has been in the spotlight of public attention
as well as
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that of the
government
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. In
this
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essay, the reasons caused by the phenomenon will be discussed followed by the measures that can address the issue. First of all, one of the main unhealthy
activities
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is bad eating
habit
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habits
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. These days, many experts have become concerned that having unhealthy eating
habit
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habits
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has a negative effect on increasing the number of obesity. Obesity
people
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tend to enjoy eating junk foods and fast foods, and they suffer from many
disease
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.
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, many
people
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may mistake that they eat more food and they look
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awesome because they are impacted
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Youtube.
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, in South Korea, since watching and reporting to eat food is a trend, so many
people
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eat more food and have bad eating
habit
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habits
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.
As a result
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, the number of
obesity
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people
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doubled during one year.
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, much needs to be done to solve
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problem
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. To address
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cause, there are several possible approaches. In terms of
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individual efforts,
people
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should recognize that they have bad habits about eating and they try to change their menu more healthy. In terms of the
government
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's efforts, the
government
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should make
activities
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they
to
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enjoy and
excercise
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exercise
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To sum up
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,
although
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unhealthy
activities
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is
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the
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serious
problem
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,
it is clear that
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much is being done to fix
this
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problem
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. If
individual
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and the
government
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work together, it will soon be the
problem
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of the past.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • chemical reactions
  • dependency
  • social and cultural norms
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • temptations
  • implementing policies
  • taxing
  • supportive environment
  • accountability
  • unhealthy habits
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