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Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution, and airport constuction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations. Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

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 recent years, travelling around the world has never been more convenient
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 the cheap
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 that airline companies are advertising.
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 led to an
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 in
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 the
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. In my opinion,
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 is just one way to control the negative effects of constant
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travel
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. With the rising popularity of
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travel
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 as a mode of transportation to go from one location to another, it brought a myriad of drawbacks.
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 traffic has been a great issue of multiple
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 which we can't recognize as we could not tangibly see it. Another disadvantage of
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 is the growing
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. It is not just
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pollution
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 noise
pollution
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 the statics in the Philippines, the ozone layer of the said country is starting to deteriorate and has a 98% chance of being destroyed in the year 2030. There are different strategies for
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tax
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. With
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, people would think twice if they really need to use
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 for a holiday.
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, if there is a higher
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 for travelling, passengers will surely decide thoroughly if they really need it or not.
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, reducing the number of
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 per airline company leads to a reduction of the negative effects.
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, only those people who can really afford to pay the
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 will be able to
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, the companies will reduce
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 in order for them not to waste their profits. To recapitulate,
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travel
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 brings various bad effects,especially to the environment. One way to solve
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 is for the government to
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 its
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, bringing companies to decrease their
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 leading to a reduction in
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 and
air
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 traffic.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental degradation
  • Noise pollution
  • Airborne emissions
  • Sustainable transportation
  • Aviation industry
  • Taxation measures
  • Economic ramifications
  • Regulatory framework
  • Technological advancements
  • Carbon footprint
  • Alternatives to flying
  • Government intervention
  • Green initiatives
  • Travel habits
  • Accessibility of travel
  • Fiscal deterrents
  • Consumer behavior
  • Global tourism
  • Market dynamics
  • Social equity
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