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People will buy a product if it has quality or fulfill their needs. There is no need for advertisement and considered as a form of entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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It is believed that
people
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purchase
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products
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 depending on their quality or if it satisfies their needs.
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, some
people
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 say that advertisement is
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no
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 anymore needed and it is just a way of entertainment. In my opinion,
people
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 will always buy
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 what they need and want. Nowadays, it is being debated if advertising still helps consumers to decide on the
things
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 to buy. One of the main criteria
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, when people purchase things,
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people
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purchase
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things
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 is based on their needs.
According to
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 Maslow's Hierarchy of needs, physiologic needs, are the basic needs of a person that should be met before they could progress to the second tier.
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, a person will always
purchase
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 food regardless of whether he is from a low-income or a high-income background because a person could not live without food or water. Everyone will surely agree that
people
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 will prioritize
things
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 that could help them survive in
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 chaotic world. Another criterion is the quality of the product. No one wants to buy a product that could only be used twice or three times. Customers will surely think of purchasing
products
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 that could be for long-term use. In the Philippines,
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,
people
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 are now awakened when buying
things
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. They don't anymore mind the price as long as it has the best quality.
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, could let them save more in the long run.
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, I think advertisements are not much of a help to
people
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 when buying. They are just merely for entertainment. They could still be useful to introduce a new product. Not all
people
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 would frequently go to supermarkets to check for new
products
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, especially the elderly. With the help of advertisements, they could easily learn about newly launched
things
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 thru television or newspapers. To recapitulate, advertising is already outdated to help consumers decide on what
products
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 to
purchase
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.
People
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 are now aware and are prioritizing
things
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 that should be purchased
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 the hardship of life. But, advertising could still help in promoting new
products
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 to the buyers.
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