The maps show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The maps show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
There are both significant and extended changes that are made between the two layouts. The first major change that can be seen is the addition of two roads from the
round about
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headed
north west
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and north. On the north
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a bridge is added so that cars can cross over the river to reach the planned housing area.
while
on the south
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another
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is added to connect the road.
Secondly
, a total of six housing
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are planned to be added
on
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both
west
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and east
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with each having a total of three housing
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.
Lastly
, to
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support the needs of the residents public
structure
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structures
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such
as
school
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schools
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,
playground
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, shops and medical
centre
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are added to the town's construction plan.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • future development
  • residential neighborhood
  • housing complexes
  • green spaces
  • parks and playgrounds
  • quality of life
  • amenities
  • self-sufficient community
  • main road
  • pedestrian walkways
  • cycling paths
  • alternative modes of transportation
  • connecting roads
  • new bridges
  • accessibility
  • transportation links
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