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The given table compares the salaries of secondary teachers in five countries in 2009.

The given table compares the salaries of secondary teachers in five countries in 2009.
The given table compares the salaries of secondary
teachers
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 in five countries in 2009.
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, the
teachers
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 from Luxembourg were the most well-paid,
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and the
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teachers
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 from Australia were the lowest-paid.
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, the Denmark
teachers
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 earned the amount of time to receive the maximum salary which was much faster than other countries. Secondary
teachers
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 in Australia and Denmark spend less than 10
years
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 receiving
maximum
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a maximum
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 salary.
At
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 the beginning, the figure for
teachers
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 from Australia
from
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was from
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 28,000
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dollar
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dollars
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 to 48,000
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dollar
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dollars
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 after 9
years
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. Meanwhile, the salaries of Denmark
teachers
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 from 45,000
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dollar
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dollars
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from
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to
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 54,000
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dollar
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dollars
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 after 8
years
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. It took
teacher
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teachers
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 in Luxembourg, Japan and Korea at least 30
years
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 to receive the maximum salary.
First,
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the salaries of Luxembourg secondary
teachers
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 accounted
from
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for from
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 80,000
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dollar
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dollars
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 to 132,000
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dollar
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dollars
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 in the period of 30
years
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.
Second,
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the figure for
teacher
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teachers
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 from Japan from 34,000
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dollar
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dollars
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 to 86,000
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dollar
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dollars
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 after 37
years
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.
Finally
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, the
Korea
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Korean
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teachers
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 with 34
years
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experience
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of experience
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 were paid
at
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apply
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62,000
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dollar
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dollars
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, years, dollar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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