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The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high stree shops. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Thanks to digitalisation, more and more sellers either launch their own online marketplaces or join the existing ones, providing customers with an opportunity
of shopping
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to shop
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 from
home
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, which they eagerly opt for.
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 some feel that regular shops still have some potential, I believe that online purchases will soon replace real ones for two reasons. The first reason is that online apps and marketplaces allow
people
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 to shop comfortably from
home
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 or anywhere else at any
time
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. Many
people
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 find online shopping easier and more practical. In fact,
people
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 tend to be exhausted by the obligation of embarking on a long journey to a certain store, wasting
time
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 searching for a particular item and standing in endless queues in order to pay and
then
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 trying and come back
home
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, being stuck in enormous traffic jams.
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, nowadays, one can pick the needed goods online and add them to a bag, review it
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 times, come up with new ideas and even bookmark favourite items, so it would take just a second to make a new order next
time
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, which is extremely convenient for grocery shopping. The second and, in my opinion, the most convincing reason is that online shopping allows for goods to be delivered directly to the
home
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.
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 I concede that some goods should better be bought at stores, clothes and other apparel items,
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, as not all
people
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 know their size and some brands have very unusual fits, currently, shops offer a free fitting option at
home
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, so that one could make a well-balanced decision before purchasing, or allow a specific
time
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 period for free return.
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,
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, elderly
people
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 could particularly benefit from the delivery of online orders, as they would not have to carry heavy bags at
home
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. In conclusion, not only online shopping
allows
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allow
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 to make orders
while
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 travelling or working, but it releases customers from
such
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 burdens as the waste of
time
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 or the weight of bags as well.
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,
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, I strongly believe that regular shops will soon cease to exist.

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