The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high stree shops. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#popularity #stree #shops

Thanks to digitalisation, more and more sellers either launch their own online marketplaces or join the existing ones, providing customers with an opportunity

of shopping

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to shop

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from

home

, which they eagerly opt for.

Although

some feel that regular shops still have some potential, I believe that online purchases will soon replace real ones for two reasons. The first reason is that online apps and marketplaces allow

people

to shop comfortably from

home

or anywhere else at any

time

. Many

people

find online shopping easier and more practical. In fact,

people

tend to be exhausted by the obligation of embarking on a long journey to a certain store, wasting

time

searching for a particular item and standing in endless queues in order to pay and

then

trying and come back

home

, being stuck in enormous traffic jams.

In contrast

, nowadays, one can pick the needed goods online and add them to a bag, review it

thousand

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times, come up with new ideas and even bookmark favourite items, so it would take just a second to make a new order next

time

, which is extremely convenient for grocery shopping. The second and, in my opinion, the most convincing reason is that online shopping allows for goods to be delivered directly to the

home

While

I concede that some goods should better be bought at stores, clothes and other apparel items,

for example

, as not all

people

know their size and some brands have very unusual fits, currently, shops offer a free fitting option at

home

, so that one could make a well-balanced decision before purchasing, or allow a specific

time

period for free return.

Moreover

for instance

, elderly

people

could particularly benefit from the delivery of online orders, as they would not have to carry heavy bags at

home

. In conclusion, not only online shopping

allows

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allow

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to make orders

while

travelling or working, but it releases customers from

such

burdens as the waste of

time

or the weight of bags as well.

Therefore

as a result

, I strongly believe that regular shops will soon cease to exist.

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