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The cost of international travel is decreasing, and so the trend of international tourism is increasing in many countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the rising trend of tourism for countries?

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There has been a new trend to travel abroad for tourism and
this
 is
due to
 the low cost of international travel. Everything has its own pros and cons, and
similarly
 is the case with the rising trend of tourism of abroad nations. The advantages of travelling abroad are
people
 learn new things
such
 as culture, food, music, and lifestyle and
also
 get to meet individuals from that country. Tourists can visit beautiful destination
place
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. The economy of the country
also
 increases when
people
 travel to different nations. The disadvantages of exploring the world are that sometimes
people
 who are travelling abroad may not be able to accept the culture of the place where they are travelling to, for ,example if a person drinks alcohol and they are visiting
in
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an Islamic nation where alcohol is hardly consumed, drinking in that nation would be a problem for both who is a visitor and for
people
 who are the citizens. There is one more case when
people
 go
to
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trekking or hiking in the forest, sometimes they throw
the
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garbage randomly and
this
 pollutes the forest place which can be extremely harmful to the environment as by any chance it was eaten by an animal they might choke on the plastic. Main cities can
also
 face a lot of traffic issues
due to
 tourism
for example
, citizens who are going to their
workplace
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, school or hospitals can be stuck in huge traffic jams and will not be able to reach them on time. In conclusion, tourists should be mindful and careful of the things they do abroad. Government should make strict laws for
people
 who are travelling to their country so that their popular places cannot be affected.
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