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Due to the development of intelligent technology, computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people say this development will have a positive impact on humans. Others have a negative view on this issue. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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These days, intelligent
technology
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 is developing
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 its fastest speed ever. Following the
development
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 of intelligent
technology
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, now it’s not wrong to say
computer
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’s intelligence is catching up
human
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beings
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. There are both positive
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 and negative
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 on
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 situation. On the one hand,
computers
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 becoming more intelligent than human
beings
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 can bring a lot of positive effects
to
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 human
beings
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. First of all, it can make humans’ life much more convenient than before.
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, some systems that
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 require human workers,
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 system
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 making our lives simple and easy. It doesn’t require non-effortless
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to
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human
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 anymore.
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, if
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 kind of non-human system can be afforded in various eras, it will make human life better. If intelligent
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 is used
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 medical services, we can solve the problem of lack of medical professionals and provide
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 medical services to humans.
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, there are some negative
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 on
this
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 issue. People who are negative
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 the
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 of
computers
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 say that we should never overlook the ability
computer
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 has. What if
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computer
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computers
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 conquer human
beings
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? When the relationship between
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computer
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computers
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 and humans is overlapped,
human
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humans
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 will be controlled by intelligent
technology
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. Since nowadays people are highly impacted and have a great affirmation on
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computer
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the computer
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, it will not be difficult for
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 to control human
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 the way it wants to.
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, the older generations that are not used to
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 will be abandoned eventually
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the
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society. In conclusion, there are different
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views
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 looking at the
development
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 of
technology
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, especially
computers
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. Actually in my opinion, now it’s time to be concerned about the power of
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computer
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computers
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. Since human
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 are highly dependent
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 intelligent
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 including
computers
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, it is important to find a way to make a great balance between technological
development
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 and human life.

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