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Doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly. However, many of them do not get enough exercise. What are the reasons? What can be done to encourage them to exercise more?

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Doctors suggest that senior
people
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sports
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 regularly.
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, many of them do not receive sufficient
exercise
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. There are several reasons why
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elderly
people
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 do not
engange
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engage
 in doing regular
workout
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workouts
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despit
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despite
 the doctors
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 it, some measures can
taken
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 by the governments to encourage them. Regarding reasons, the primary reason why
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people
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 do not
playing
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sports
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 regularly is they do not have enough time.
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most
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older
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 spend
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 majority of their time in workplaces.
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most senior
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 work 50 hours a week and, maybe they work overtime, which
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do
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 not give them space to
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sports
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 . Extremely expensive of joining
to
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sports
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facilities
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 is another reason why
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elderly
people
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 do not get enough of playing
sports
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.
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, joining
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sports
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facilities
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 namely,
swimming
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 club, tennis court,and gym cost above 200 $ every month, which
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 price can demotivate senior
people
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to
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from
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 doing
exercise
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. In terms of motivations, the first effective measure,
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the
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that
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 companies could build
sports
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facilities
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 in their buildings in order to incentivize
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older
people
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 to
engaging
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to
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sports
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.
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, the General Electric company have
a huge sport
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huge sport facilities
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facilities
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 and allocate 1 hour every day to
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encourage
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exercise
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.
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,
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 step can help to mitigate the stress among workers, and
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 enhance their productivity. The second incentivize, the authorities should give every citizen free or affordable membership in order to motivate them to
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sports
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,
which
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this
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 step can make a huge difference and increase the number of older
people
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 in
sports
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facilities
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. In conclusion, there are many reasons why older
people
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 do not get enough
exercise
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although
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 the
doctos
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doctors
doctor
advice
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 them including, lack of time for
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, expensive of
memership
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membership
of
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sports
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facilities
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,
however
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,
the
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they
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 are some steps to motivate , companies build
build
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sports
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facilities
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, governments could provide free or affordable spots membership.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivation
  • physical limitations
  • lack of time
  • fear of injury
  • exercise facilities
  • misunderstanding
  • benefits of exercise
  • social support
  • poor health conditions
  • awareness
  • appropriate exercises
  • guidance
  • financial constraints
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