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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research thi

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Nowdays
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,
people
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 become increasingly interested
for
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in
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 looking up
about
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the
history
 of their living house. The reason behind that the natural disasters and the right home
price
 are essential for
chossing
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choosing
their
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 owners that they would
to
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live in.
However
, today, individuals could find out
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information about land
further
 easily. Having the
history
 of
building
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the building
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 is essential .
Firstly
,
being
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homeowners should have awareness of
the
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natural disaster
such
 as flood, typhoon and earthquakes which the buildings
has
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 faced previously will determine your choice. 
Forexamples
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,
earthquake
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the earthquake
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 that attack
turkey
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Turkey
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 in December 2022 , which
it
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results
destroying
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in destroying
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 many buildings and dying a thousand of
people
 ,the outcome of
this
 ruin which leading
departments
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departments'
department's
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prices
 has
significant
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 decreased with withdrawal sales.
Therefore
,
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 of safety living is one of the essential
factor
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due to
 the fact that
people
requiriments
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requirements
 to feel secure in their
home
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homes
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 wherever they are living in. On other prospects,
people
 are interested in obtaining the
price
history
 fluctuations of
building
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buildings
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 and
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 houses to predict future
prices
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price
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 changes.
However
, predicting
prices
 in the next years is still challenging. With
advance
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 technology
the
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internet applications
has
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have
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 become tremendously popular ,which could obtain all information that indicates
need
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a need
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 through
websits
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websites
 or apps
by
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with
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 just a click button to realize the specifications including building
price
 ,
history
,
prices
 fluctuations and being furnished or not.
they
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They
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 may
also
 inquire the details from asking the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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.
For instance
,In Uk, there is
app
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an app
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 called "
move
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Move
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 to" that could install through Apple Store or
android
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Android
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 stores which
containing
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contains
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 all building
guide
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guides
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 that
require
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 for sale or rent. In conclusion. Finding out the
history
 of the home is very vital because
the
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natural disaster has become more popular.
In addition
, the fluctuations of
price
 to suspect the land
price
 future is
also
 another
factors
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factor
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.
Morever
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Moreover
, being able to
seeking
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 about information in our
decede
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decade
decide
 has become more smoothly to know
about
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all details.
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