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People should be allowed to obscure their identity online. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #identity
These days, the online world has a huge impact on human society. Compared to the
last
 generation, it is natural for
people
 to usually communicate in the online society. The interaction between
people
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online is causing a lot of various issues, and one of the reasons for these issues is whether
people
 should be allowed to obscure their
identity
 online or not. Personally, I am concerned about the side effects
anonymity
 can bring. On the one hand,
people
 regard
anonymity
 as a certain 'power' that they can abuse.
For example
,
people
 blaming others has become a 'sports'
in
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online. By hiding behind the computer and their fake
identity
in
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online,
people
 have turned much more
agressive
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aggressive
 than in
offline
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 world.
Therefore
, suicide caused by
cyber bullies
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 is a serious social problem nowadays.
On the other hand
, there are some positive impacts that
anonymity
 brings. The 'power' earned by anonymous
identity
 often gives
people
 a right
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 freedom.
For example
, by using anonymous websites,
people
 can share their personal experiences and give advice to others. In
this
 point of view, anonymous
identity
 is a social protection for
people
.
However
,
besides
 the positive effects, we need to admit that
anonymity
 is causing serious problems. In conclusion, there are both pros and cons
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 allowing
people
 to obscure their
identity
 online. But the point is that we should be aware of the side effects of
anonymity
, and find a solution for a great balance between privacy and social protection.
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