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The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984.

The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984.
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The diagram gives information about the different
age
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 categories
according to
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 both genders in two particular countries which are
France
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 and
India
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 in 1984. From an
overall
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 perspective, it can be seen clearly that the Indian population tended to expand, whilst the percentage of inhabitance in
France
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 had a stationary growth.
In addition
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, the birth rate in
India
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 was higher than in
France
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,
however
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, the French lived longer than Indians. First and foremost,
France
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 adopted a mature
age
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structure
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 type, with more than a third of the population (32%) being in young adults (15-35 years old) and approximately 24% being in middle-aged adults (35-55 years old). Moving to the second diagram, it can be understood from the statistic that the
age
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structure
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 of
India
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's population had a typical young
structure
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 which was wide at the bottom. To be specific, the 0-15
age
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 group in
India
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 (over 40%) was much larger than the same pattern in
France
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 (21%).
While
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 the top oldest
age
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 in
India
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 was around 70, the figure for
France
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 was up to 85. Looking closely at sexes, in the 50 and above
age
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 range, there was a noticeably high proportion of French women than men.
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, almost 3% of people in the 80-85
age
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 group were women, and men only took up 1%.
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, the
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structure
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 of
India
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 had a balance between the two genders.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, france, india, structure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • age structure
  • populations
  • France
  • India
  • 1984
  • overall
  • different
  • evenly distributed
  • proportion
  • young people
  • elderly individuals
  • largest age group
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