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Research recently shows an increasing number of business meetings and trainings taking place online. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowdays
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 a lot of
people
work
 full or
part time
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part-time
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 from
comfort
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the comfort
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 of their homes.
This
 system
was became
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became
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 very popular in
past
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the past
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 few years, but especially during
COVID
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the COVID
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 pandemic, so since it worked really well for
majority
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the majority
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 of workers and companies, a lot of them decided to continue with it even after
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 finished. Some
people
 prefer to
work
 remotely since it gives them
chance
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a chance
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 to spend more time at
home
 with their families and pets
,
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 and to organize their schedules better.
People
 who are working from
home
also
 can save a lot of time and money that they would spend travelling to
workplace
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the workplace
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.
Also
,
this
 is very beneficial for
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
also
 since
increasing
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the increasing
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 number of
people
 staying at
home
 decreases
number
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the number
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 of
people
 using transportation.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think that working from
home
 can be very isolated and affect
mental
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the mental
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 health of workers
,
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apply
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 since gathering
on
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in
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workplace
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the workplace
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 has
social
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a social
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 purpose too. In conclusion, remote
work
 has more advantages than disadvantages, but
downsides
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the downsides
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 of
this
 system should not be ignored, so the best solution for
the
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apply
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most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
 would be to do hybrid
work
.
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