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The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table and pie charts provide information about the 2017-18 police
budget
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 of one area of Britain. The table displays the sources of the
budget
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's funds
while
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 the charts show where the fund went.
Overall
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, the total police
budget
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 increased with the national government being the biggest funder in both years. In terms of expenditure, salaries remained the primary form. In 2017, the police had a total
budget
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 of 304.7
million
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, which rose significantly to 318.6
million
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 in 2018. The majority of
this
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 money was sourced from the national government, with an increase from 175.5
million
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 to 177.8. Of all sources of funding, local taxes saw the largest growth from 91.2
million
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 to 102.3
million
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, whilst other sources accounted for 38.5
million
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 of the total
budget
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 in 2018, 0.5
million
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 more than the previous year. Expenditure primarily consisted of officer and staff salaries,
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 the proportion decreased from 75% to of the total 69%.
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, spending on technology almost doubled from 8% to 14%
whereas
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 expenditure on buildings and transport remained unchanged at 17%

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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