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Topic: People living in big cities face several problems. What are these problems?

In
this
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 day and age, life in the
city
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 has become a heated topic. It has its own benefits and drawbacks. Some of these problems have to be dealt with on a daily basis.
This
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main
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 troubles and how to solve these issues.
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 with
traffic
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 jams,
traffic
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 jams are becoming a serious issue in
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citizens
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 daily life. Most
people
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 want to live in large
cities
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 which
lead
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leads
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 to more private vehicles. During rush hour,
traffic
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 in the
city
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 is chaotic,
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people
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and people
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 and their vehicles will get stuck on the street for a long time.
People
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 will feel extremely tired when waiting on the road with chaotic
traffic
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.
Traffic
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 accidents in
cities
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also
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 tend to occur more and more frequently than in rural
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. The most suitable way to tackle
this
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 issue is by using public transport. Using public transport
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 helps to reduce the number of vehicles on the road, thereby helping to reduce
traffic
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 congestion. Another measure
people
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 can
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 limit going out during peak hours by choosing to work from home
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 or changing working hours to avoid rush hours. Addiction,
people
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 in big
cities
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also
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 face the problem of lack of living
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. More and more
people
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 live in big
cities
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 leading to
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a lack
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 of
space
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,
people
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 usually only have a very tiny living
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space
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spaces
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 like apartment buildings that don't even have balconies or windows. Children growing up in the
city
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 will
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 have a play
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 because the living
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 is too small. Long-term living in a small
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 can easily make
people
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 feel uncomfortable. If
people
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 want to live in a larger living
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, residents living in the
city
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 have to pay a price many times more expensive than in the countryside.
This
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 can completely be overcome by expanding job opportunities to rural
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 to attract
people
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 to
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nonurban
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. Attracting
people
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 to rural
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 will contribute to reducing the number of
people
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 in the
city
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, thereby expanding the living
space
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 in the
city
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. In conclusion, living in large
cities
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 can bring
people
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 a lot of job opportunities but
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 make
people
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 face many daily problems
such
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 as
traffic
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 jams,
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and lack
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 of living
space
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. These problems can be completely overcome
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 the ways mentioned above.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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