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The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. Write at least 150 words.

The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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, how
uk
people
 spend their income in different categories in the year 1971 and 2001.
overall
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Overall
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, in 1971
uk
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UK
people
 spent
most
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the most
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 on
food
comparing
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compared
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 to other categories.
Where as
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Whereas
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 30 years later
car
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cars
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 became one of the leading
position
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positions
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 in their habit. In 1970, most of the money are spent on
food
 with 44%, followed by a car which is twice lesser than
food
.
Uk
people
 depleted similar proportions in petrol and furniture as 10% and 9%.
Likewise
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,Likewise
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 they spent equal shares on
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
book
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books
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.
However
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,However
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 computer was
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the least
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least
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last
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 used by
the
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apply
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people
 . In regard to 2001 ,
people
 showed more interest
on
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in
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car
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cars
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 which is twice higher than the year 1970.
Meanwhile
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,Meanwhile
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people
 spent
equal
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an equal
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 amount on
food
 and restaurant
as
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at
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 14%. The chart represents both furniture and petrol
has
Wrong verb form
had
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same
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the same
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 percentage in 2001.
Although
uk
Correct your spelling
UK
people
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people's
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 usage
in
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of
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computer
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the computer
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were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased
6times
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6 times
 higher than
1971
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in 1971
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but
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apply
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the
book
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booking
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 amount has decreased to 12 time
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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