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The supplied picture shows information about the variations in incomes of secondary or high school
teachers
 in 2009 in five distinct nations. At first glance, it is apparent that the total number of
Luxembourgers
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Luxembourg
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teachers
' salaries dominates the highest position.
Besides
,
teachers
’ earnings in Denmark are the most rapidly increasing and reach the maximum amount the quickest. It can be seen that Luxembourgers
teachers
’ incomes take over the top position of the starting point at 80,000, whilst those of Japanese and Koreans are around 34,000 and 30,000, respectively. These three countries need approximately 30
years
 to reach the top salary. The other impression of the table is the speed of the rising income of secondary and high school
teachers
 in both Australia and Denmark.
While
 Denes
teachers
’ wages just need eight
years
 to become the quickest nation to reach the top salary, which climbed up from 45,000 to around 54,000 over the period shown,
Australia
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Australian
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teachers
 have the lowest amount of starting salary but still reach the second position at nine
years
 in the same rating. After 15
years
, secondary/
highschool
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high school
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teachers
 in Australia can witness an increase in their income to 48,000.
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