Today it is common to see a famous sportsperson advertising sports products. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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current
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time it is quite normal to experience a sports product advertised by
well known
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athalet
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athletes
athlete
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there are numerous advantages of these types of trends than drawbacks. In the
begining
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, I would like to talk about what are the benefits of if any celebrity sportsman promotes any type of sports or their products.
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helps us as an
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audience
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to understand the benefits and use of these products.
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why
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celebrity is promoting and how he or she benefited from
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products
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.
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our knowledge about
such
gears which we have never experienced before.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorsement
  • familiarity
  • influence
  • inspiration
  • trust
  • boost
  • motivation
  • over-reliance
  • quality
  • misleading
  • vetting
  • promote
  • affordable
  • celebrity status
  • effectiveness
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