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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 201

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 201
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terms of the rate of
people
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 who ate at fast-food restaurants in the USA from 2003 to 2013.
It is clear that
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 the percentage of
people
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 who ate at fast-food shops every day was by far the lowest.
Additionally
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, the rate of
people
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 who ate once or twice a
month
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 experienced the most noticeable change during the research period. In 2003, the proportion of
people
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 who ate once a
week
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 was highest, at about 31%
while
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 the figure for several
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 a
week
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 was significantly lower, at 17%. Meanwhile, the proportion of
people
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 who ate at fast-food shops once or twice a
month
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 accounted for 30%. At the same time, only 5% of
people
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 came from
people
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 who never ate. In 2006, there was a slight increase of 2% of
people
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 ate once a
week
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 and
people
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 ate a few
times
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 a year in the USA.
By contrast
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, the percentage of
people
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 who ate once or twice a
month
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 gradually declined by 5%. In 2013, the proportion of
people
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 who ate a few
times
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 a year had 15%, which was 12% higher than that of every day. The period of 7 years from 2006 to 2013 witnessed an insignificant decline of 4% of
people
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 eating several
times
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 a
week
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. Meanwhile, at the top position was the percentage of
people
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 who ate once or twice a
month
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, at 34%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, month, week, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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