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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
#information #railway #systems #six #cities #summarise #features #comparison
The table shows information
of
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about
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 the underground
railway
 system
about
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how old, how long the route is,
how
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and how
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 many passengers use it in
London
,
Paris
,
Tokyo
, Washington D.C, Kyoto, and Los
angeles
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Angeles
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.     
Overall
,
it is clear that
London
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the London
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railway
 was built
the
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a
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 longest time ago and has
thw
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the
 longest route among
six
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the six
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 countries.
On the other
hand
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 people in
Tokyo
 use it the most.      Looking at the table more closely, one can see that
London
 and
Paris
 railroad
system
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systems
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 were built around the same time.
While
 the length of the
London
railway
 extension is twice as long as that of
Paris
, users of
Paris
 were more than that of
London
 by over 400
millions
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million
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 people.
Tokyo
railway
 built in 1927 is the most used with about 2000 passengers, but
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the kyoto
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kyoto
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Kyoto
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railway
 has only 45
millions
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million
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, which is the least figure. The most recently
constucted
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constructed
 Los
angeles
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Angeles
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railway
 has 28
killometers
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kilometres
 of
route
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the route
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 and the second
fewst
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few
 passengers of 50
millions
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million
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.  Washington D.C
railway
 extension is around the same
with
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Tokyo
, but  Washington D.C
railway
 is less than one-tenth the extension of
Tokyo
railway
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, london, paris, tokyo with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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