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The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to present time. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to present time. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps
displays
Change the verb form
display

The singular verb displays does not appear to agree with the plural subject maps. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 the development which is been made of a school from the year 1985 to
present
Correct article usage
the present

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 time.
Overall
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, new amenities
has
Change the verb form
have

The verb has does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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 been constructed over
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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time for the welfare of students,
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

however
Add a comma
,however

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase however. Consider adding a comma.

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 the entrance and exit gateway and Office haven't been restructured since 1985. The massive difference which can be seen is on the playground fields which has been dwindled
into
Change preposition
to

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 half compared from the 1985 year to the present year, now new facilities are built over the field
such
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 as Pool and Fitness centre. Over the period
classrooms
Change the noun form
classroom

Your sentence appears to use the incorrect form of classrooms. Consider changing it to singular.

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 size has seen a gradual enlargement to probably accompany more learners. In 1985, there used
be
Add the particle
to be

It appears that the verb be should be in the to-infinitive form. Consider adding the word to.

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 a library which is now reconstructed into
Learning
Correct article usage
a Learning

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 resources centre and within there is a computer room as well. The roads are demolished which used to go to the playing fields, followed by an additional car parking has been built in the present time.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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