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An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays,
technology
 is becoming some kind of necessity, it has seen part of our
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. In
this
 way, schools are
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starting
 to accompany
this
 development around
world
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the world
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 and laptops, tablets are
being
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a good choice
instead
 books or printed materials. There are
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 of advantages
as
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 to take heavy materials,
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 most of
study
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 lessons
in
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 a computer, and, tasks are more fast to do and to teach.
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,
people
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have
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an increasingly
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increasingly
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 necessity to have some kind of
technology
 with them,
being
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not just in class, but
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 home too. First and foremost, the growth
tablet
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of tablet
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 and
laptop
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laptops
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 in schools around the world is immeasurable, because of
development
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 of
technology
. The facility for teachers
teach
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 or prepare the lesson is incomparable
with
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in
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 the
pass
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past
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. Does not matter if is
tutor
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a tutor
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 or
student
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a student
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, they do not
need
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 bring or use heavy books or
having
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have
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lot
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 of papers,
jut
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just
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 need open the computer and almost
everthing
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everything
 they need is there,
for instance
.
Secondly
, the public
are
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 more and more dependent
in
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on
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 having some
technology
.
People
 do not
talking
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 more
how
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about how
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 to was before, justifying in want to be in
celphone
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cellphone
cell phone
, touching
with
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someone or
inside
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on
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the
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social media. If schools provide
this
 type of structure, for sure when arrive
in
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home,
lot
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a lot
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 of
people
 want to go into the internet too. Most of the time without
talk
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 with family,
friends
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or friends
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 or doing something outside. Unfortunately, families are being impaired
with
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by
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 all that. In conclusion, having facilities in our
lifes
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lives
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 and mainly in
study
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,
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 is very helpful and
sometime
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 fascinating. Despite
this
, we need to be careful.
The relationship
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 with
people
 face to face is very important and necessary,
in other
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 is healthy.
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