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You used a moving service to move your house.At your new address you discovered that some of the items were damaged.Write a letter to a manager of a company. *Give details of your move. *Describe your damage. *What you would like than to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my annoyance about the service that your company provided me
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 week. I availed of one of your services a few days ago to move my house from Brampton to Surrey. I have been a regular customer of our organization. I was extremely impressed with the service that you gave to one of my friends when they moved their home. The first thing I would like to draw attention to is that our staff did not have management skills. They kept the fragile things at the bottom and kept heavy equipment on it.
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, your employee took a lot of time to reach the destination. When I called them, they started making excuses that they were in traffic. The rest of the services are satisfactory, not happy with the things that were damaged during travel,
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 as the mirror, the bed frame, the grinder, and many more. I would be grateful if you could give me a full refund, or I would ask you to fix the problem as a matter of urgency and repair my damage. Unless the problem can be fixed in the next few days, we will be forced to find an alternative way to resolve it. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Manjinder Kaur

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task achievement
Consider providing more detail about specific examples of good service from your previous experiences to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Use transition phrases to improve the flow of the letter, making it easier to follow.
task achievement
The letter contains a clear expression of dissatisfaction and a request for resolution, which is essential in formal correspondence.
coherence and cohesion
You maintained a polite tone throughout the letter, which is important in formal writing and reflects well on you as a writer.
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