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the charts below show the level o ìf partecipation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

the charts below show the level o ìf partecipation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The bar charts below describe how the involvement in schooling and science differed between developing and industrialised regions in 10 years, more specifically by considering 1980 and 1990. It can be seen from the graphs that industrialised
countries
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 invest a significant amount of time and resources in education and
scientific
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 field, overtaking the amounts invested by developing states.
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, it can be stated that there has been a global rise in all the aforementioned sectors, with the exception of US dollars spent on research and development by the developing
countries
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, which halved in 1990 compared to 1980.
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, for what concerns the variations in schooling time, there was a slight increase worldwide. Indeed, citizens spent 1 year and 2 years more at school in developing and developed
countries
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, respectively.
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, despite the global growth in the number of scientists and technicians, it is worth mentioning the fact that the latter almost doubled, going from 40 experts per 1000 people to 70. The same cannot be affirmed for developing regions that experienced only a small increment.
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, the amount of money spent
in
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 research in the industrialised world plummeted and reached almost 350 US $
billions
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billion
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. Contrarily, developing
countries
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 invested half of the amount that was been invested 10 years before.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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