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Some people say that using smartphones should be banned in most schools. Do you agree or disagree with that?

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These days, public debate has been going on over whether
students
 should be able to use mobile in
school
 or not. I tend to believe that mobile devices should be able to access for
students
 and should not be banned in any case - for the following reasons. There are two main factors that support the idea of smartphone accessibility in
institute
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. The primary factor is we need to take into consideration that in
this
 rapidly changing world every
students
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 already
have
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has their own smartphone
also
 as a part of their body.
Besides
, schools should be able to adapt to the change and take
this
 opportunity to teach
students
 about how they their
smartphones
 wisely and when they should and shouldn't
used
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 them in the
school
 area.
Further
, nowadays parents have to work harder than ever to sustain the family finances so most
of
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modern families don't have time to pick up their children by themselves. It is important for them to be able to contact their kids through mobile phones or even to check whether they are safe on the way back home. I admit that there is
also
 a drawback
of
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 using
smartphones
 in
school
such
 as it can distract
students
' attention in class or be
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 as a tool to cheat during exams. Despite that, schools should create
a ground rules
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 with their pupil without banning
from
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them from
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department
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, for which we can find plenty of evidence from our own experience. In conclusion, I would disagree about banning
smartphones
 in
school
.
However
, it is
school's
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 responsibility to adapt to change and create an environment where
students
 can use
smartphones
 in more beneficial ways.
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