The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve

different countries.
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The graph compares all the victories that countries have had since the beginning of the Olympic games. It is clear from the charts that the USA is the winner of the Olympic medals. If we compare it to the rest of the nations, we can see that it has won 900 golds with a total of 2,300 medals, which is triple that of other countries like the UK.
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, in the chart, we can see that Japan is the loser of the games. Effectively, it has a very small number of medals won, in comparison with other countries like the USA or France.
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, nations like China or East Germany are not very far from its position.
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, we can say that the more developed is the land, the better its performance in the sportive sector. As we said, the USA had been victorious, and maybe it has to do with its power. But China or Japan are
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lands with important potential, but maybe not in
this
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kind of activity.
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