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Scientists tell us that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people still continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions for this?

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Nowadays,
people
 are informed about the effect of healthy and unhealthy lifestyles. Despite scientists pointing out the
activities
 which can benefit health, a vast amount of
people
 still sustain doing
activities
 that are unhealthy. Generally, there are a multitude of causes for
this
 kind of occasion.
Firstly
,
this
 may be
due to
 bad habits. If
people
 continue doing harmful
activities
 for a long time, it is hard for them to get rid of the bad customs. Many
researches
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types of research
pieces of research
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 show that for
people
 who keep smoking or drinking for more than 3 months, it will be extremely difficult to abstain from tobacco and
drink
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drinking
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, and
therefore
, even if they realize how bad it is for their bodies, they still can not give up doing these things.
Moreover
, some individuals can not avoid doing some unhealthy
activities
due to
 their job category.
This
 can be exemplified by individuals like doctors and white-collar workers. Most of them have to stay up late in order to finish their work, especially doctors, they need to continue working until there are no more patients come.
On the other hand
, these factors can be solved by following solutions.
First,
the government must increase citizens’ awareness of the importance of keeping a healthy body.
This
 can be done through giving public speaking or giving out leaflets. As long as
people
 understand the cherish of staying healthy, they will do their best to maintain it.
Additionally
, the government should increase the tax on producing demerit goods, the price of demerit goods will increase as the tax on making
it
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them
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 becomes higher,
therefore
, it will be more expensive for
people
 to purchase them, so fewer demerit goods will be bought. In conclusion, I believe that in the future, more
people
 will choose to live in a healthy way and as technology and medical treatments developed, human life expectancy will be much longer.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • chemical reactions
  • dependency
  • social and cultural norms
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • temptations
  • implementing policies
  • taxing
  • supportive environment
  • accountability
  • unhealthy habits
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