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The graph below shows the qatari import totals( in tons) for several types of vegetables from 1980 to 2020.

The graph below shows the qatari import totals( in tons) for several types of vegetables from 1980 to 2020.
#qatari #import #tons #vegetables
The pie chart below shows the statistics of imported
vegetables
 into Qatari from 1980 to 2020. It is evident that spinach sees a
reduced
Replace the word
reduction
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of
Change preposition
in
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 imports from 2000 to 2020
while
 all the other
vegetables
 sees an increase or
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 amount of imports after the year 1980.
To begin
, garlic and broccoli witnessed a steady import to the country
while
 spinach is declining in imports. Peas
on the other hand
 have the same amount imported into the country from 1980 to 2000 and
sees
Correct subject-verb agreement
see
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 an increase of 20 tonnes in 2020.
While
 some
vegetables
 sees an increase
during
Change preposition
from
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 2000 to 2020, ginger
have
Change the verb form
has
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 imported 50 tonnes lesser in 2020 despite it being imported 60 tonnes more from 1980 to 2000.
Therefore
, from the pie
chart
Add a comma
,chart
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 we can assume that garlic is the most demanded
vegetables
Fix the agreement mistake
vegetable
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while
 peas have always been the least demanded
vegetables
Fix the agreement mistake
vegetable
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since
Change preposition
from
show examples
 1980 to 2020.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words vegetables with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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