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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The graph illustrates the number of
hours
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 per day that
Chinese
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, American,
Turkish
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, and
Brazilian
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visitors
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 spent
time
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 doing activities during on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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, the amount of
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 that
visitors
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 in four countries do on holiday reading
books
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 was the highest.
Turkish
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 and
Brazilian
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visitors
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 like spending their
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 on activities at the
beach
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. The amount of
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 that
tourists
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 visit places was
least
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. All the
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 and American
tourists
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 preferred spending their
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 reading
books
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.
Chinese
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 travelers spent 8
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 reading
books
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 on vacation and Americans spent 5
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.
Chinese
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tourists
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 spent
time
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 doing activities at the
beach
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 was 3
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,
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 Americans spent 4
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 each day. Both groups spent
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 amount of
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 visiting places on vacation in Green. Contrary to
Chinese
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 and American
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,
Turkish
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 and
Brazilian
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travelers
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travellers
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 spent more
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 at the
beach
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.
Turkish
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tourists
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 spent 5
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 at the
beach
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 on a daily
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 and
Brazilian
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tourists
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 spent 6
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 at the
beach
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.
Turkish
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 and
Brazilian
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tourists
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 spent the same
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 reading
books
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 for 4
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 each day on vacation.
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,
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 and
Brazilian
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visitors
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 spent
least
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time
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 visiting places for 3
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 and 2
hours
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 respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 65%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, chinese, turkish, brazilian, visitors, time, books, beach, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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