The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

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The graph illustrates the number of

hours

per day that

Chinese

, American,

Turkish

, and

Brazilian

visitors

spent

time

doing activities during on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

Overall

, the amount of

time

that

visitors

in four countries do on holiday reading

books

was the highest.

Turkish

and

Brazilian

visitors

like spending their

time

on activities at the

beach

. The amount of

time

that

tourists

visit places was

least

Correct article usage

the least

show examples

. All the

Chinese

and American

tourists

preferred spending their

time

reading

books

Chinese

travelers spent 8

hours

reading

books

on vacation and Americans spent 5

hours

Chinese

tourists

spent

time

doing activities at the

beach

was 3

hours

whereas

Americans spent 4

hours

each day. Both groups spent

least

Change the article

the least

show examples

amount of

time

visiting places on vacation in Green. Contrary to

Chinese

and American

visitors

Turkish

and

Brazilian

travelers

Change the spelling

travellers

show examples

spent more

time

at the

beach

Turkish

tourists

spent 5

hours

at the

beach

on a daily

basic

Replace the word

basis

show examples

and

Brazilian

tourists

spent 6

hours

at the

beach

Turkish

and

Brazilian

tourists

spent the same

time

reading

books

for 4

hours

each day on vacation.

Finally

Turkish

and

Brazilian

visitors

spent

least

Change the article

the least

show examples

time

visiting places for 3

hours

and 2

hours

respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, chinese, turkish, brazilian, visitors, time, books, beach, tourists with synonyms.

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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are those problems and how could they be reduced?

Food can be produced much more cheaply today because of improved fertilizers and better machinery. However, some of the methods used to do this may be dangerous to human health and may have negative effects on local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?