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Films and computer games which contain violence are very popular. Some people believe they have a negative effect on society and so should be banned. Other people, however, say they are just harmless and help people to relax. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The growth of smart devices helps people ease access at the touch of a button;
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 society movies and
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games
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 that contain harmful
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 have a detrimental effect on the public and should be restricted,
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, some argue that they are harmless and just used as a pastime. In my opinion, it depends upon every individual perspective,
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this
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content
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 might have an impact on minor children so it can be restricted to the usage of kids under 18. Primarily, Movies and
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games
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 with harmful
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 can easily be played and watched over smart gadgets in the comfort of the home.
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,
this
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content
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 might have a negative brunt on children who are under 18 as they find it difficult to see the difference between an imaginary world and the real one.
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, many kids may get addicted towards it. Certainly,
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 has a brunt on their personality and behaviour as they believe everything, they are watching is true to their knowledge.
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, a Few years back there was an online
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 called "Blue Whale" where it influences the crowd to do things that are banned and illegal,
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this
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, some kids had a brunt on their mental health.
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, the
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 has been completely banned all over the world. Unequivocally, I believe that these impacts might differ for each and every individual. So, these
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 should not be completely banned for everyone, as some adult finds it as a stress-buster. Predominantly, it depends on the age factor where they could able to understand the difference between the real world and the virtual one.
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, working people after a rough day may find it relaxing to play a
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game
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 or watch a crime thriller with friends and family.
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, there is a
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 called "PUBG" where two groups of friends would be playing it one against the other which gives them a sense of relaxation.
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, even though harmful
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 in movies and
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 has negative effects it
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 helps some people to relax in their leisure time. Despite banning it completely for everyone, the government can enforce age restrictions to play
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games
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 with
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content
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.
Submitted by vyshu.bakkiam on

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