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New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#technologies #children #time
New
technologies
 have changed the way
children
 spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? It is a well-documented fact that an increasing number of the public are drawing attention to the effect of modern technology on how the younger generation
spend
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 their leisure time.
While
 there are some
people
 who strongly believe that the aforementioned phenomenon is detrimental to
children
, others claim that it might be beneficial.
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 my perspective, I wholeheartedly agree with the former argument. On the one hand, the potential that
technologies
 hold is
an obvious evidence
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 for other
people
 to defend them. It is acknowledged that innovative devices
such
 as phones and computers provide access to
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endless storage of knowledge through the internet.
Therefore
,
children
 now can satisfy their curiosity with just a few clicks on the keyboard, unlike
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 past when they had to invest hours in the library for an answer
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 their question. Another worth noting point is that
technologies
 connect
people
 from around the world regardless of
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, thereby proving themselves to be tremendously convenient and a wonderful
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 tool.
For instance
, juveniles can contact their parents overseas or learn another language with native speakers
while
also
 befriending them.
On the other hand
, there are two primary points for other
people
 to defend their view that handling technology incorrectly will be dangerous for the health and development of minors.
To begin
 with, it is an undeniable fact that a number of
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 and physical health issues are caused by overusing technical advancements. To illustrate, news outlets have been reporting violence from
children
 who were separated from their video games and electronic devices.
Furthermore
, it is inevitable that only devoting time
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technologies
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technology
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instead
 of other activities will hinder them
in
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 developing some necessary life skills which will affect their performance in mundane tasks. An example would be
children
 who are solely dependent on calculators find it hard to perform even
elementary level
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 math problems without it. In conclusion,
although
technologies
 might be useful educationally, we must admit that
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long exposure to these devices
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also
 to blame for stagnant development and a notable number of health problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Inappropriate content
  • Self-learning
  • Screen time
  • Social inequality
  • Enhanced communication
  • Creative expression
  • Educational resources
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