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The graph shows how different types of students in Canada use the internet in general, through broadband or through wireless mediums (phones, laptops). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows how different types of students in Canada use the internet in general, through broadband or through wireless mediums (phones, laptops). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs
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 the proportion of
students
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 in
canada
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 using
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internet
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 in general ,
broadband
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 and wireless devices .The users are categorized
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 various categories .
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, all adults , non-
students
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 , undergrads , grad
students
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community
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 college .
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 , all adults
uses
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internet
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 ,which is accounted for 75 %.
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non-
students
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 prefer
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internet
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 as compared to
broaband
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broadband
 and wireless devices. Non-
students
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 using
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internet
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the internet
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 ,which is accounted for 92 % and for
broadband
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user
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 it is about 82% .On another hand side , undergrads are at the highest proportion for using
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internet
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,which is nearly 98 % and
broadband
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 preference is slightly low than
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internet
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,which is 93 %.
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, the percentage of
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students
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 who prefer wireless devices is 92 % .
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 ,Grads
students
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 accounted for 99 %
for
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 using
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internet
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 . At the same time , they
uses
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broadband
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 at 95 % .
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 ,community
collegesuses
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colleges uses
colleges use
internet
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 at 94 % and wireless medium at 85 % The proportion rate is low for
broadband
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user
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,which is
for
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78 % . community college
prefer
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internet
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 ,which is accounted for 94%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, internet, broadband with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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