Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest of our lives, while others believe that adult life brings more happiness. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued by some teenagers that
adult
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life will bring them the most happiness
while
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a number of adults
disagrees
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with being an
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is the happiest of their lives. In
this
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discussion, I will write about why I think that in teenage years is the
happient
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happiest
moment of my life.
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, an
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adult
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happiness would usually revolve around the ability to earn income and spend money on things that would not be affordable as a teenager.
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, as an
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adult
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I am able to afford plane tickets for
a
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travel
a journey
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travel
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in
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to
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other countries
while
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being
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a teenager would not have
that
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the
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ability to enjoy
an
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impromptu
travel
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.
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, teenagers will have lesser responsibilities and stress compared to an
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,
although
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adults have the money, they might have too
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responsibilities to spend on
such
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entertainment.
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, teenagers can plan a
travel
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with his/her friends on
a
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apply
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domestic travels and still enjoy without a single worry about paying taxes, loans, and other costs.
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, I would think that being a teenager will be the happiest years in our lives given that in those years there are
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responsibilities and friends are still around.
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, an
adult
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planning to
travel
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with friends might be difficult
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circumstances
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as work or
families
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family
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